fifty-five
Okay…sorry I’m so late with the story. I’m such a slob…
And babel, I was so supremely confident that I would not be tagged for the story that I read your story but didn’t read whom you had tagged… *holding ears doing mental oth-bosh*. Now I’ll stop rambling and get on with it…
It was a one in a million chance. He tried to stare past the sheets of rain and the cloak of the dark. He was alone. And there she was. She moved towards him. So close he almost heard her breathe. She smiled. The glint in her eyes hypnotised him. She turned and was gone.
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great story :D
"Now I’ll stop rambling and get on with it…"
I guess... it was meant excluding the last paragraph. :-)
BTW: Thoug a cliché. Yet well written. Could have had ornated it with simplicity.
ui: thanks
adroit: a bit cliched maybe...but as for the language...that's the way i like it...
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sad ending..why? write a 55-word poem if you can
jaded: i did not intend the ending to be sad. i just left it to the reader to take a guess. that's the beauty of a short story. even one this short ;)
nice..and thanx for stopping by my blog
Oh well done!! Now tell me I can post your story here: http://55-words.blogspot.com/
Sutiably linked and accredited of course :D
Yup... you should let this be put up on the 55-word fiction blog!
The ending leaves many possibilities open. Nice story!
babel: sure u can put it on the website...
kanti: thanx
nice story
hmmm.. :-)
good one.
oye, wher have you disappeared?dead or what?
nice one.
sorry all...had probs with my comp, so i couldnt come online at home for almost a week now. the one post i did make was at a friends place...sorry...will post asap
Interesting one. Ever considered writing the 55 word poem? You'll find the link to the post on my blog.
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